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I think it's a good start - I know what you're going for with the somber nature, and I think there' some potential to move it along, the only difference is what you make of it. I see it heading one of two directions:

  1. The episode becomes something reminiscent of "The Fourty Year-Old Virgin", starring Noxigar, Fritz and Lang - The Rosen-Borgs try to cheer Noxigar up by augmenting his social graces and putting him back on the market, hilarity ensues, even amongst the sea of emotion, that greatly increases Noxigar's self-worth
  2. Noxigar attempts to adjust to Bell and Sarah living in the house, even if only for their honeymoon(I actually assume you offer them the master bedroom so they can be permanent fixtures in the household - easily remedied by making them change their minds about spending just their honeymoon during the episode). As he attempts to drive them away(or apart), he realizes that what makes him happy is his work - the mad science he uses to try and deal with them.

The only reason I think these are the two directions it's going are as follows:

  • The humor, while present, currently isn't strong enough in my opinion to carry any other sort of plot along. Those two plot paths were hypotheses based on what I've read, which suggests both humor and an actual sappy love message.
  • Bell and Sarah don't have enough immediate characterization for my interests. I think if I knew some more of them(within the context of their meta), I would have a more informed decision on the direction of the story.

Either way, keep up the hard work and try to develop the humorous nature so that it just slightly offplays whatever you're doing with the plot - Don't think you need to use my plot hypotheses as actual directions, I am far more interested in what you can come up with on your own. Artisan of TortureThey call me Big T BLOODArtisan of Torture 06:42, 22 December 2012 (UTC)

HI HO, HI HO IT'S OFF TO READING RECORDS OF BELL I GOOOOOOOONoxigar 06:45, 22 December 2012 (UTC)