Wikihood/eps/7 - Revision history

Noxigar at 08:00, 31 March 2019

2019-03-31T08:00:33Z

Noxigar at 03:44, 19 November 2018

2018-11-19T03:44:23Z

Noxigar: one hipster line didn't really work well so I modified it so the scene played out a bit less shittily

2018-11-19T03:16:34Z

one hipster line didn't really work well so I modified it so the scene played out a bit less shittily

Noxigar at 01:45, 19 November 2018

2018-11-19T01:45:51Z

Noxigar at 06:26, 18 November 2018

2018-11-18T06:26:20Z

Noxigar at 05:48, 18 November 2018

2018-11-18T05:48:38Z

Noxigar at 05:39, 18 November 2018

2018-11-18T05:39:32Z

Noxigar at 04:29, 18 November 2018

2018-11-18T04:29:27Z

Noxigar at 04:17, 18 November 2018

2018-11-18T04:17:24Z

Noxigar: I might have more but for now this has helped Shining Happy People be a much better Episode.

2018-11-18T04:16:32Z

I might have more but for now this has helped Shining Happy People be a much better Episode.

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 ''{The hallucinations disappear. A new vision appears of an elderly man in exquisite arcane robes. He also has long dark-grey hair, and a black beard. Despite his advanced age, the man is significantly physically fit, with a presence that is particularly intimidating and legendary. The man roars at Chaos.}''
-'''????:''' FELIX!!!!!!!!
+'''??????:''' FELIX!!!!!!!!
 '''CHAOS:''' Don't ''you'' even bother. I am not doing this today, not ever.

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	'''STEPHANIE:''' Good stuff, good stuff.		'''STEPHANIE:''' Good stuff, good stuff.
−
−	~~''{Short pause.}''~~

	'''GARFIELD:''' Is this one of those "I'm in great pain, please help me" calls?		'''GARFIELD:''' Is this one of those "I'm in great pain, please help me" calls?

@@ Line 337: / Line 337: @@
 '''GARFIELD:''' Honestly, I could out-emo Chaos.
-''{The eyes of several hipsters widen, as if shocked by what Garfield declared.}''
+''{The eyes of several hipsters widen, as if shocked by what Garfield declared. He closes his eyes and sighs. The hipsters all get up, though they do not appear to be hostile.}''
-'''INTERSEX HIPSTER:''' I feckin' knew it.
+'''FEMALE HIPSTER:''' What an odd co-winky-dink... We've all got places to be.
-''{Garfield closes his eyes and sighs. The hipsters all get up.}''
+'''INTERSEX HIPSTER:''' However, we did intend to attend a concert, if you'd like to hang out with us some time?
 ''{Garfield looks back at his laptop and scientific journals, before shaking his head.}''

@@ Line 697: / Line 697: @@
 ''{A lightbulb appears over Garfield's head. His expression becomes a bit more hopeful.}''
-'''GARFIELD:''' As you wish.
+'''GARFIELD:''' Sure, I can do that!
 '''STEPHANIE:''' So, if you do come, you can't do one of those "dress in D'Arque's grandmother's clothes and look incredible at the same time" things either.

@@ Line 13: / Line 13: @@
 ''{Chaos carries on flicking through the channels. He eventually stops, landing on an international news channel. A Dwarven gentleman, with a posh English accent and a well-tailored suit, is presenting in front of giant globe. The globe looks similar to the one we have in real life, but close inspection shows the presence of several more islands and an extra continent in the South Pacific Ocean.}''
-'''THROVIN IRONBROW:''' My name is Throvin Ironbrow and you are watching CBB News International. The Democratic Elven Republic of North Syllahona has considered the possibility of nuclear disarmament after re-establishing diplomatic relations with the Human domain. In a joint statement with President Nithea Valodue of South Syllahona, the illusive Supreme Leader, Eltaor Jovvyn-Yun has agreed to engage in talks with the United Nations.
+'''THROVIN IRONBROW:''' My name is Throvin Ironbrow, and you are watching CBB News International. The Democratic Elven Republic of North Syllahona has considered the possibility of nuclear disarmament, after re-establishing diplomatic relations with the Human domain. In a joint statement with President Nithea Valodue of South Syllahona, the illusive Supreme Leader Eltaor Jovvyn-Yun has agreed to engage in civil talks with the United Nations.
 '''CHAOS:''' ''Oh joy. Politics.''
-'''THROVIN IRONBROW:''' Despite a long history of hostility towards the human domain, North Syllahona has famously maintained diplomatic relations with the Republic of Pulau Syurga, which is located in South East-Asia, even enjoying diplomatic visits from its leader, General Agostino Torratz. Some speculate that Torratz could play a part in peace talks between the human domain and the Elven Republic, while others fear that his long history of human rights abuses may complicate the issue further, as-
+'''THROVIN IRONBROW:''' Despite a long history of hostility towards the Human domain, North Syllahona has famously maintained diplomatic relations with the Republic of Pulau Syurga located in South East-Asia, even enjoying diplomatic visits from its leader, General Agostino Torratz. Some speculate that Torratz could play a part in pivotal peace talks between the Human domain and the Elven Republic, while others fear that his long history of human rights abuses may complicate the issue further, as-
-''{Chaos turns the television off. He lifts his arms to stretch and he yawns.}''
+''{Chaos turns the television off. He lifts his arms to stretch, and he yawns.}''
 '''CHAOS:''' Bored. Ugh, is there ''anything'' to do?

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 ''{Cut to the interior of the Rosenberg Association. Leigh is in Jacqueline's office. Sitting next to him is Jules. Jacqueline is sitting at the desk while looking at piece of paper.}''
-'''JACQUELINE:''' I have to say, Leigh. My expectations for you were... not that high, but you have surprised me quite pleasantly. Especially so, for someone who couldn't barely hold a job. You've singlehandedly increased company productivity in the two weeks you've been around.
+'''JACQUELINE:''' I have to say, Leigh. My expectations for you were... not that high, but you have surprised me quite pleasantly. Especially so, for someone who couldn't hold a job for very long. You've singlehandedly increased company productivity in the two weeks you've been around.
-''{Jacqueline looks up at Leigh and half-jokingly makes a remark.}''
+''{Jacqueline looks up at Leigh.}''
-'''JACQUELINE:''' What are you?
+'''JACQUELINE:''' ''{half-jokingly}'' What are you?
 '''LEIGH:''' I'm a Human. Born in... Michigan.
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 ''{Jacqueline scoffs.}''
-'''JACQUELINE:''' Not like that. I mean, how have you done such good work when your history says otherwise?
+'''JACQUELINE:''' Not like that. I mean, how have you done such good work... when your history says otherwise?
-'''LEIGH:''' Well... I haven't been the luckiest man around. Things eventually go wrong and it usually screws me up.
+'''LEIGH:''' Well... I haven't been the luckiest man around. Things eventually go wrong, and it usually screws me up.
-'''JULES:''' Yo bruv, don't let that get ya down! I've been fuckin' up my entire life, and I don't even got a job!
+'''JULES:''' Yo, bruv; don't let that get ya down! I've been fuckin' up my entire life, and I don't even got a job!
-'''JACQUELINE:''' Right. Anyway, as you are aware, we have the fundraiser for Xavier D'Arque coming up in a couple of days, and I would like ''you'' to help us organize it.
+'''JACQUELINE:''' Right. Anyway, as you are aware, we have the Fundraiser for Xavier D'Arque coming up in a couple of days, and I would like ''you'' to help us organize it.
 ''{Stephanie walks in. Jacqueline stands up and introduces her.}''

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 * Leigh impresses Jacqueline by lasting longer than a week at Rosenberg Industries.
 * Leigh gives Stephanie some pointers on Drow cuisine, to help with the Fundraiser.
-* Stephanie takes some time to get Garfield to promise not to interfere with the Fundraiser, despite D'Arque's douchebaggery.
+* Stephanie takes some time to get Garfield to promise not to interfere with the Fundraiser, despite D'Arque's d'ouchebaggery.
 == Transcript ==

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	'''LEX:''' I said, "Let me think about it."		'''LEX:''' I said, "Let me think about it."
		+
		+	''{Cut to Garfield, who is now by himself. He is on a trolley, with his laptop and edited scientific journals sitting next to him. His phone rings, and he answers.}''
		+
		+	'''GARFIELD:''' Hello?
		+
		+	''{The screen splits in half, to show Stephanie on the other line.}''
		+
		+	'''STEPHANIE:''' Garfield! Where exactly are you right now?
		+
		+	''{Garfield looks around.}''
		+
		+	'''GARFIELD:''' I finished modifying some journals and was heading back to NoxCorp's Labs to show them to Xiorno, before I head home.
		+
		+	'''STEPHANIE:''' Good stuff, good stuff.
		+
		+	''{Short pause.}''
		+
		+	'''GARFIELD:''' Is this one of those "I'm in great pain, please help me" calls?
		+
		+	'''STEPHANIE:''' Kind of.
		+
		+	'''GARFIELD:''' I'm all ears. Not literally, of course, but... yes.
		+
		+	''{Stephanie lightly chuckles.}''
		+
		+	'''STEPHANIE:''' I would like for you to attend the D'Arque Fundraiser. It'd be nice to see you there, if only to make things less hellish on me.
		+
		+	'''GARFIELD:''' As much as I'm repulsed by the idea of being in the same room as Xavier D'Arque, I'm otherwise happy to oblige.
		+
		+	''{Stephanie hums cheerfully.}''
		+
		+	'''STEPHANIE:''' At the same time, I need to make a specific request. Don't harm D'Arque whilst there.
		+
		+	'''GARFIELD:''' His brazen disrespect of you has been observed. I'm not sure I can forgive him for it.
		+
		+	''{Stephanie sighs wistfully, loud enough that it echoes on Garfield's end.}''
		+
		+	'''STEPHANIE:''' Think of it as being there for moral support of ''me.''
		+
		+	''{A lightbulb appears over Garfield's head. His expression becomes a bit more hopeful.}''
		+
		+	'''GARFIELD:''' As you wish.
		+
		+	'''STEPHANIE:''' So, if you do come, you can't do one of those "dress in D'Arque's grandmother's clothes and look incredible at the same time" things either.
		+
		+	'''GARFIELD:''' Awwwwwwww, why not?
		+
		+	'''STEPHANIE:''' Mostly it's a formality, but also I think D'Arque ''will'' have you kicked out if you do that.
		+
		+	'''GARFIELD:''' The shitstrangler.
		+
		+	''{Short pause.}''
		+
		+	'''GARFIELD:''' Sorry. I know how important this is for you.
		+
		+	'''STEPHANIE:''' Alright. Try not to get in harm's way before the Fundraiser!
		+
		+	''{Stephanie and Garfield mutually hang up. A few seconds pass by, as Garfield gazes upon Katyusha's.}''
		+
		+	'''GARFIELD:''' ''{wistful sighing}'' As you wish.
		+
		+	''{The screen cuts to black. End.}''

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 '''CHAOS:''' Interesting...
-''{Cut to Garfield and Tracy, who are now alone in Surreal Cereals. Tracy is drinking another cup of coffee while Garfield is still eating cereal.}''
+''{Cut to Garfield and Tracy, who are now alone in Surreal Cereals. Tracy is drinking another cup of coffee while Garfield is still eating cereal. Garfield's laptop appears to be shut, with the visibly and strongly edited scientific journals stacked on top of it.}''
-'''TRACY:''' Y'know man, I don't think it's that healthy to so much cereal at once.
+'''TRACY:''' Y'know man, I don't think it's that healthy to so much cereal at once...
-'''GARFIELD:''' Nonsense! Pumpkin Spice Chocolate Deluxe is part of nutritionous and balanced breakfast!
+'''GARFIELD:''' Nonsense! Pumpkin Spice Chocolate Deluxe is part of nutritious and balanced breakfast!
 ''{Tracy shrugs.}''
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 '''TRACY:''' A'ight. Just warnin' ya, bro.
-''{Tracy's phone rings. He answers it. Yelling can be heard on the other end of the line. Before he can even say anything, it's hung up.}''
+''{Tracy's phone rings. He answers it. On the other end of the line, loud screaming can be heard. Before Tracy can even say anything, the phone hangs up.}''
 '''TRACY:''' Yikes, man.
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 '''GARFIELD:''' What's wrong?
-'''TRACY:''' It's your friend. He quit and then got fired.
+'''TRACY:''' It's your friend. He quit, and then got fired.
 '''GARFIELD:''' How is that even possible?
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 ''{Cut to Lex, sleeping at his job at the Mattress Warehouse. Chaos walks in through the front doors, waking Lex up.}''
-'''CHAOS:''' Yo, Lex. I quit my job, so I'm gonna chill with you for a-...
+'''CHAOS:''' Yo, Lex. I quit my job, so I'm gonna chill with you for a-
 ''{Chaos notices that the store is almost entirely empty.}''
-'''CHAOS:''' Bit?
+'''CHAOS:''' ...bit?
 ''{Chaos looks at Lex.}''
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 '''LEX:''' Nah. Though, I will remind you the same thing I've had to remind a few other people. If you want something, you gotta buy it. Company policy an' all that.
-''{Open to Chaos and Lex in the Mattress Warehouse. Chaos has just finished explaining the details of his HappyMart job with Lex.}''
+''{Fast-forward, with a caption below the next scene reading "A Few Moments Later..."}''
 '''LEX:''' Sorry you had to deal with that shit, mon.
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 '''CHAOS:''' I have a much better idea. Hold on.
-''{Chaos pulls the HappyMart flier from out of his pocket which advertised the fundraiser. He slams it onto the counter. Lex picks it up and reads it.}''
+''{Chaos pulls a familiar HappyMart flier from out of his pocket. He slams it onto the counter. Lex picks it up, and reads it.}''
 '''CHAOS:''' Let me give you a hint; it starts with "Xavier" and ends with "D'Arque's Senatorial Campaign."
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 '''LEX:''' ...hosted at The Rosenberg Association Ballroom... sponsored by HappyMart... Hm.
-'''CHAOS:''' This job seems nice and all, but surely you must find it boring.
+'''CHAOS:''' This job seems nice and all, but surely you ''must'' find it boring.
 ''{Lex puts the flier down.}''
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 '''CHAOS:''' This is better. Don't you miss the excitement? The thrill? The action?
-'''LEX:''' I do, but- I'd rather ya not get sent back to prison again. It's not even been a month, brudda!
+'''LEX:''' I do, but-
 '''CHAOS:''' You forget the Eleventh Commandment - "Thou shalt not get caught."
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 '''CHAOS:''' Such a big and open area, no staff, no customers. We could make this our base of operations!
-'''LEX:''' Let me think about it.
+'''LEX:''' I said, "Let me think about it."