Wikihood/eps/3 - Revision history

Noxigar at 19:21, 21 November 2018

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Noxigar at 15:05, 20 November 2018

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Noxigar at 00:14, 14 November 2018

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Noxigar at 14:21, 9 November 2018

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Noxigar at 02:43, 5 November 2018

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Noxigar at 02:41, 5 November 2018

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Noxigar at 02:39, 5 November 2018

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@@ Line 331: / Line 331: @@
 ''{Leigh takes a few seconds to process where Jules had come from, why he might be here, and what has happened within the job interview.}''
-'''LEIGH:''' Wait, is Ms. Rosenberg your aunt?
+'''LEIGH:''' Wait, is Miss Rosenberg your aunt?
 '''JULES:''' You betcha, fam!

@@ Line 277: / Line 277: @@
 '''LEIGH:''' Ah, shoot. I assumed-
-'''JACQUELINE:''' Let this be a lesson to you, Mr. More. Assumptions are the mother of all eff-ups. It's ''Miss'' Rosenberg.
+'''JACQUELINE:''' Let this be a lesson to you, Mister More. Assumptions are the mother of all eff-ups. It's ''Miss'' Rosenberg.
 ''{Another short pause. Leigh still has his hand out.}''

@@ Line 203: / Line 203: @@
 '''JACQUELINE:''' Of course, why wouldn't he be...? Very well; next question. What would you say your greatest weakness is?
-''{Leigh takes some time to respond. Jacqueline's expression looks hopeful, as if he has a good answer.}''
+''{Leigh takes some time to respond. Jacqueline's expression looks hopeful, showing she is expecting him to have a good answer.}''
 '''LEIGH:''' Probably that I keep getting fired from jobs.

@@ Line 277: / Line 277: @@
 '''LEIGH:''' Ah, shoot. I assumed-
-'''JACQUELINE:''' Another pointer; assumptions are the mother of all eff-ups. It's ''Miss'' Rosenberg.
+'''JACQUELINE:''' Let this be a lesson to you, Mr. More. Assumptions are the mother of all eff-ups. It's ''Miss'' Rosenberg.
 ''{Another short pause. Leigh still has his hand out.}''
@@ Line 295: / Line 295: @@
 '''LEIGH:''' Yes, ma'am!
-'''JACQUELINE:''' Good. Another head's up; you start tomorrow, at 7:00 AM. Now, if you'd just fill out these forms here...
+'''JACQUELINE:''' Good. You start here tomorrow, at 7:00 AM. Now, if you'd just fill out these forms...
 ''{Jacqueline slaps the papers on the table, and sits down.}''
-'''JACQUELINE:''' ...then we should be ready to go, by the time you return tomorrow morning.
+'''JACQUELINE:''' ...then we should be ready to go, by the time you return. Be ready for ''anything.''
 '''LEIGH:''' Once again, I thank you for the position! You won't regret this, I swear it!

@@ Line 149: / Line 149: @@
 ''{The kid looks at the card in amazement.}''
-'''KID:''' Holy mackerel!
+'''KID:''' Hoooooooolyyyyyyyy shiiiiiiii-
 ''{Fast-forward to Leigh speeding through the highway on the pair of roller skates, shifting in between cars as he rushes towards the evil building.}''

@@ Line 627: / Line 627: @@
 '''JULES:''' Nah. I just like checkin' up on him.
-''{Tracy nods, taking Jules' credit card. He slides it through the cash register. Tracy prints out a working copy.}''
+''{Tracy nods, taking Jules' credit card. He slides it through the cash register. Tracy prints out a working copy of the receipt.}''
 '''TRACY:''' He's doing fine.

@@ Line 179: / Line 179: @@
 ''{Cut to an establishing shot of the Rosenberg building.}''
-'''JACQUELINE:''' Well, Mr. More, I must admit your resume is not impressive.
+'''JACQUELINE:''' Well, Mister More, I must admit your resume is not impressive.
 ''{Cut to a meeting room, where Jacqueline is interviewing Leigh. His suit is in significantly worse shape than before. Jacqueline flips through his resume, which has also been damaged.}''
@@ Line 257: / Line 257: @@
 ''{Leigh falls to the floor, as he is still wearing rollerskates.}''
-'''JACQUELINE:''' Just as a head's up, rollerskates are not appropriate attire for this position. They're also wildly unprofessional for an interview.
+'''JACQUELINE:''' Just as a head's up; rollerskates are not appropriate attire for this position. They're also wildly unprofessional for an interview.
 ''{He lifts his head up.}''
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 ''{Leigh jumps up to his feet with perfect balance, and rushes to shake Jacqueline's hand.}''
-'''LEIGH:''' Thank you so much, you absolutely will not regret this Ms. Rosenberg!
+'''LEIGH:''' Thank you so much, you absolutely will not regret this, Mrs. Rosenberg!
 ''{Jacqueline shakes Leigh's hand more firmly, in response.}''

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	'''LEIGH:''' Wait a sec... cross-examine a parrot? The courtroom? What? I'm just confused, at this point.		'''LEIGH:''' Wait a sec... cross-examine a parrot? The courtroom? What? I'm just confused, at this point.

−	''{The next shot shows him opening the door to go back to the main part of the bar. He readjusts himself to his surroundings, and spies Jules not far ahead. Leigh convenes with Jules, who gives him the promised bag of quarters and gestures at the Golden Girls Pinball Machine. The camera pans over to it briefly, then back at Leigh - who has a smile on his face, once again. He approaches the Golden Girls Pinball Machine with a confident stride that feels unfamiliar to himself, as the scenery fades to black. The letters for "WIKIHOOD" show up, one by one. Once the letters are all on-screen, they glow a faint ~~violet~~, signalling the end of the episode.}''	+	''{The next shot shows him opening the door to go back to the main part of the bar. He readjusts himself to his surroundings, and spies Jules not far ahead. Leigh convenes with Jules, who gives him the promised bag of quarters and gestures at the Golden Girls Pinball Machine. The camera pans over to it briefly, then back at Leigh - who has a smile on his face, once again. He approaches the Golden Girls Pinball Machine with a confident stride that feels unfamiliar to himself, as the scenery fades to black. The letters for "WIKIHOOD" show up, one by one. Once the letters are all on-screen, they glow a faint crimson, signalling the end of the episode.}''

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 ''{Jules showcases a comically large bag of quarters, then puts it back in one of his pockets.}''
-'''JULES:''' Don't give up on your dreams! Let's cross-examine that parrot!
+'''JULES:''' Don't give up on your pinball dreams! Let's cross-examine the parrot in the courtroom!
 ''{Jules begins marching out of the men's restroom, but stops himself.}''
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 ''{Jules exits offscreen, for real this time. Afterwards, Leigh takes some deep breaths for roughly a few seconds. He looks at himself, in the mirror.}''
-'''LEIGH:''' Wait a sec... Ned never cross-examined a parrot!
+'''LEIGH:''' Wait a sec... cross-examine a parrot? The courtroom? What? I'm just confused, at this point.
 ''{The next shot shows him opening the door to go back to the main part of the bar. He readjusts himself to his surroundings, and spies Jules not far ahead. Leigh convenes with Jules, who gives him the promised bag of quarters and gestures at the Golden Girls Pinball Machine. The camera pans over to it briefly, then back at Leigh - who has a smile on his face, once again. He approaches the Golden Girls Pinball Machine with a confident stride that feels unfamiliar to himself, as the scenery fades to black. The letters for "WIKIHOOD" show up, one by one. Once the letters are all on-screen, they glow a faint violet, signalling the end of the episode.}''

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 ''{Leigh looks unnerved, and slightly put off by what was said. Cut to a shot of Jacqueline Rosenberg, asleep in her office. She awakens, extremely pissed. She looks around, concernedly. Cut back to Leigh and Jules.}''
-'''JULES:''' I don't mean it in a ''bad'' way. It's just somethin' I personally noticed. You're both badass people who have trouble with regular everyday things, but still get by based entirely on how badass you are. It's actually inspiring. You inspire me, Leigh. I think I love you.
+'''JULES:''' I don't mean it in a ''bad'' way. It's just somethin' I personally noticed. You're both badass people who have trouble with regular everyday things, but still get by based entirely on how badass you are. There's definitely more than that, but right now that's the reason you and her ain't so different. How badass you are is actually inspiring. You inspire me, Leigh. I think I love you.
 ''{Leigh nods slowly. He is then stunned, when he realizes what Jules just said.}''
-'''LEIGH:''' Alright, I've got to say, that's really sweet! But, um... I recently broke up with someone.
+'''LEIGH:''' Alright, I've got to say, that's really sweet! But, um... I recently broke up with someone. On top of that, we've only really just met.
 ''{Jules blinks.}''